Thursday, May 27, 2010

Four Dogs

Added a couple chapters to Four Dogs yesterday. Felt like I needed to bridge the confrontation between Jeremy and Batu a little better. Next I'm moving on to a confrontation between J.J. and his mom. I need to give him some more conflict to make his ultimate decisions even harder.

Here's a little glimpse from the new material:

J.J.’s head filled with confusion and fear. He felt on the verge of passing out.

Behind him, the German Shepherd let out a painful yelp and then fell silent.

J.J. spun around, listening.


He turned back to look at the ledger once more.

“You shouldn’t be in here, boy.”


Jeremy screamed and jumped away from the book.

When had Batu arrived? How long had he been here, standing, listening, watching, waiting?

The old man stood in the doorway, blocking the exit. J.J. looked across at the window, wondering if he could run and jump through it before Batu could cross the room.

“I wouldn’t try it, if I were you, Jeremy,” Batu said, as if reading J.J.'s thoughts.

“Come. Sit with me.”

J.J. hesitated.

“I won’t hurt you. Unless you force me to,” Batu said.


  1. this is good writing. I'm looking forward to reading this book with my son.

  2. Oooh, chills.

    How did I miss this a couple days ago? I always check my blog list.

    Anyway, good stuff here, Jeff.

  3. Really good stuff! This book is going to be amazing. :)

  4. Good scene here, Sir Jeff. Batu scares me; my guess is he's supposed to. Need to know more.

  5. Thanks, everyone. I've been so busy lately, I haven't had time to work on it. Hopefully I'll get some projects off my desk this week and next, and I'll be able to get back to work.

    God, I sure hope so anyway. It's been a tough couple weeks.